Sunday, November 16, 2008

Something of an excerpt


It's sweater time!

More writing at Morseland. Makes the hours just melt away. Noticing that this year, although the story is much less coherent, I'm able to get the words done at decent hours. Not nearly as much 3AM writing, or exhaustion, or stuff like this which was simply autobiographical material about what I saw when looking in the mirror one day. 28,531 words and other than killing most contractions, using 2 adjectives when 1 will do, and one or two minor word pads, all the words are honest-to-goodness words that belong. (These are different from good words whose number is much smaller....)

Anyhow, here's some stuff:

Back at the party, Kate noticed strange couple completely out of place at the affair. The gentleman wore a fedora, a long cape, short pants and jackboots, while the woman wore a Chinese robe and her feet were wrapped in dirty gray bandages. Rather than being ostracized, however, they were surrounded by a captive audience. Intrigued, Kate approached the group.
The man was speaking loudly, while the woman danced in circles around him. The crowd that had gathered were clapping along, cheering whenever the man said something that they found particularly poignant.
“….and I say that is bupkis!” shouted the man. “If we are not free to choose are own destiny, why then did our forefathers gather this collective of colonies into a nation in the first place? Would we not at be better off still under British rule? At least then, our tea would not be so expensive!”
The crowd burst into applause. Kate turned to one observer and asked, “Who is that man?”
“That is Mr. Hutcheson,” replied the man. “He is a great speaker, is he not?”
“He’s a great something, alright,” Kate said under her breath. The man was ridiculous, garish, and far too overt in his disdain for the Union to be genuine, Kate thought. But still, it was the strongest lead she had and she would be remiss if she didn’t pursue it. So, she lingered at the edge of the crowd, half-listening to Hutcheson’s rantings while she scanned the crowd for signs of Abernathy and Ferrandini, neither of whom she had seen thus far.
Hutcheson’s speech eventually trailed off, having invoked the wrath of God, good Southerners everywhere, and common decency upon any man, institution or entity who tried to take away his given rights to own another man, drink as much whiskey as he wanted to or dance on Sunday mornings. The crowd dispersed, and Kate was left standing, facing Hutcheson and the dancing woman who was now busy gathering up a handful of coins that the crowd had thrown at their feet. Kate shook her head, wondering what other entertainment the evening would have to offer. She was turning to leave when the Hutcheson stopped her with a piercing gaze, filled with uncomfortable familiarity.
“I don’t believe we’ve had the pleasure of meeting,” Hutcheson said.
“We have not,” Kate replied.
“Ah, yes, well. Allow me to rectify that. I am Mr. John Hutcheson, and this,” he gestured towards the robe-clad woman, “is my associate, Miss Hattie Lewis.”
“Pleasure to meet you,” Kate said automatically. “My name is Barley.”
Hutcheson crossed the ten feet of floor that separated them and asked, “Miss Barley?”
Kate sighed. “Yes, Miss Barley. Miss Mary Barley.”
Hutcheson took Kate’s hand and kissed it delicately, though he looked as if he were considering more. “It is a pleasure to meet you.”
Kate took her hand back distastefully. “Indeed. If you’ll excuse me….” She searched for an excuse to leave Hutcheson’s company.
Hutcheson leaned in more closely and whispered, “I think your cover may have been compromised.”
Kate recoiled in shock. “Who are you?” she demanded.
“Why have you never heard of John H. Hutcheson? Southern loyalist? Performer extrordinaire? Gadfly, layabout, ne’er-do-well? Or perhaps, John H. Hutcheson, comedian, sharpshooter and master chef? No?”
Kate shook her head. Hutcheson lowered his voice again, “Perhaps you have heard of” and his voice changed to one very familiar to Kate “Mr. Allan Pinkerton, detective, loyal Unionist, friend to honesty, foe to crime?”
“Mr. Pinkerton!” Kate hissed.
“Quiet, Kate,” Pinkerton said. “It wouldn’t do to be overheard.”
“When did you arrive? What are you doing here?”
“I arrived this morning, and I’m doing the same thing you’re doing: attempting to serve our country’s good by protecting the life of its leader-to-be.”
Kate gazed past Pinkerton at the dancing woman who was now making a circuit around the room, holding Pinkerton’s hat and asking each man she passed for a donation of any change they could spare.
“Who is she?” Kate asked.
Pinkerton glanced over his shoulder. “Ah, that is Miss Hattie Lawton – she’s going by Lewis on this mission – another fine addition to the Pinkerton Woman’s Detective Agency.”
“The what now?” Kate asked.
“Oh, I neglected to inform you. I’ve decided that my success with you could be duplicated, so I’ve established – much to my sons’ displeasure, mind you – a division within the agency made up of female agents. I know you were proud to be the only woman amongst us, but take heart in knowing that you will always have been the first. And besides, now you’ll have someone to talk to.”
Kate wrinkled her nose in disgust. “I’m not sure that we’d have that much in common.”
“Oh come now,” Pinkerton said. “She’s quite charming, in her own way. She does tend to get lost in her roles, though. I told her to play eccentric, but she’s taken it well beyond there and all the way to flat out crazy.” Pinkerton sighed. “Still, she’s amusing. And very convincing.”
“Speaking of convincing,” Kate said, “that was quite a show you put on there.”
“Did you enjoy it? I was quite proud. Wrote it on the train from Chicago.”
“It was hardly subtle.”
“Subtlety, I’ve found, is not an art that these people have much appreciation for. No, better to go over the top, let people have no doubts about where your loyalties lay.”
“If anyone believed that act, they’ll have no doubts about yours.”
“Exactly.”
“You said that you think my cover may be blown?” Kate asked.
“Indeed. I noticed a distinct chill exhibited towards you by many of those in the crowd. Either they suspect you are a Unionist, or else you did something, in your few days here, to anger them.”
“I did attempt to provoke Ferrandini – you received my letters, didn’t you? – with a prayer for Lincoln’s health,” Kate admitted.
“And why, pray tell, did you do that?”
“I’m not sure. I supposed I had tried everything else.”
“So instead of the subtle approach, you took a blunter tactic,” Pinkerton suggested.
“I imagine I took the wrong approach.”
Lawton returned, Pinkerton’s hat almost filled with coins. Taking the hat from her, Pinkerton asked, “How much, do you think?”
“About twenty-five dollars, all told,” Lawton said.
“This will make a fine donation to someone’s cause,” Pinkerton mused.
“Hello Miss Warne,” Lawton said. “It’s a pleasure to meet you. Allan has told me so much about you.”
Allan? thought Kate. She calls him Allan?
“I wish I could say the same about you,” Kate replied. “I’ve heard next to nothing about you.”
“Well,” Lawton said, “I’ve only just come on board. But Allan says I’m a natural. That I have a great future ahead of me in the business.”
“That’s splendid. Will you excuse Allan and me for a moment?”
Lawton looked at Pinkerton who, with the slightest movement of his eyes, told her to leave them in private.
“Are you sleeping with her?” Kate demanded.
For the first time in their association, Pinkerton appeared not to have anticipated Kate’s question. “What?” He laughed nervously. “Of course not! Miss Warne, don’t be ridiculous. You sound just like my sons.”
“Well, your sons are as observant as you, sometimes. The apple doesn’t fall far from the tree. They figured us out rather quickly.”


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